I like the way the short story is laid out. But there are somethings I didn't really like.
"As the heat of the day increased….I took a few more swigs of the foul water and took a nap. When I awoke I just laid on my sleeping bag and listened to the sound of the sand blowing. When it was late afternoon it was time to make the trek into town and see what I could find." This part here I didnt think was relevant like it makes the story longer but it doesnt really speak to me. I also dont understand what he is or she is? Are they poor or are they like magical creature. I didnt really get that. "Each house is different. Some have the bleached bones of family pets still chained to the dog house." I like this part a lot because I can actually picture the dogs bone and feel the pain of the dog living outside. I think this part at the end of the story is so nice because I can see everything and I feel bad in a way but in a good way. "With the wind still…… there is a deep and pervading silence. I can hear my ears ringing and the pulse beating in my head" I really like the story but I think there should be more details of why he is like that because it keeps me wondering. Overall it was a good story because I could picture a lot of things that the character was talking about and I could feel what they were feeling.
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